Wednesday 16 September 2015

POETS UNITED - A SONG DELICATE

“Colorless green ideas sleep furiously.” - Noam Chomsky

Poets United this week has as its theme, “Let your song be delicate”. Here is my offering:

At Night

Night fell softly, covering all
As if in flakes of blue-black snow;
Silence reigns, sky revolves.

I fought with sleeplessness
And won – as for my prize:
Your remembrance in a dream.

And it was as though I had drunk
A deep draught of sweet red wine,
Mixed with oleander poison, green.

Stars sparkle like tears falling,
The moon absent, perhaps it has set,
And an owl hoots.

I stir and turn, wakeful once again,
The room cold, dark, quiet,
And by my side, an empty space…

17 comments:

  1. Oh you captured the tone and dark mood so perfectly here. It has an ominous feel to it - so well done!

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  2. Oh the oleander poison, the absence looms larger, and everything beautiful is a mere reminder. Been there. Such delicate sleep in a sweet poem, such pain.

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  3. Mozart would have composed this song. Some dark somber tones indeed.

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  4. I think that empty space beside you is influencing the song you are hearing in the night.
    Alone can be so very loud.

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  5. Oh, the silent song of the darkness of the night.. can sometimes be eerie and sometimes soothing.
    Powerful write.

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  6. I like this. Remembering someone in a dream can definitely be a delicate experience. Sometimes it feels so very real, and it is hard to believe that beside one there is only an empty place. I wonder if one reached over one could feel the warmth of what was (never) there. An evocative poem, Nick.

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  7. Oh the bitter-sweetness of that dream! Vividly written.

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  8. I like the way you've captured the intensity of the night, which describes your pain, your loss, her absence. Very well done. Enjoyed reading it.

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  9. Magical the blue black snow.. nicely done!

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  10. Loss pain and loneliness...feelings magnified at night. Sad and lovely poem.

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  11. "blue-black snow"...takes the lead to that bittersweet realm of an empty space...dark and beautiful....

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  12. An exquisite piece! The stars sparkling like falling tears got me...

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  13. That silence aches and sings - the oleander poison seemed particularly resonant..so many intoxicating images and colours

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  14. Gorgeous writing. I love the imagery.

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  15. Your words paint the mood perfectly. Bittersweet and painful.

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  16. Each verse has wonderful images that build up to that melancholy last line. Beautiful poem...

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  17. Your imagery is great the feeling of loss and emptyness is very strong, yet the last stanza hits like a hammer.

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